...So as I drive away with my parents I try to hold onto every brick, window, and plant that aligned my once called home, because I knew from there I would never look at my house the same way as I do now. Which was true. I never have gone back to my house and actually admired every brick or tree that surrounded my yard. After two years I still can't decipher that I'm not living there anymore and that chapter in my life is over. I do love my new bloomington house, but I have never called it..my home. In my old house I thought of it as my own domain where I felt comfortable and I knew where every single nook and cranny lied. But what I do realize now was that even though I won't be able to remember every single day of my life on Sherwood Ave, I will always remember those summer nights on my swing set...
So this is my conclusion for my Personal Narrative. I'm still not sure how to tie in the beggining and ending but I do know that I have to add in my swing set in the last paragraph..so if you have any creative things to say about swing sets..let me know!
Also! If anything doesn't make sense..for instance the entire paragraph just let me know :) I was alittle rushed.
3 comments:
Ang I love the idea about your house and the impact of moving. I think it sounds really good! Especially when you say it was rushed..pfft. Maybe you could begin your narrative with you playing on your swing set, describe it and how much it meant to you and then we could feel how happy your are to recall those memories. I dunno. Your voice is really strong in this paragraph, i can hear your voice while i read it. This didn't really need any fancy word choice to demonstrate your feelings.
i agree with everything kassie said, but i would like to add that I like the way you left the reader to just think at the end. But I do think you have to sorta explain why the swing set you can remeber and not other tings in your house...I was kinda confused, but maybe I'm jsut too logically about it
ANGELINA! where is your other blog. I feel you're like a superhero, and this is your "normal" person self whilst your other blog where,i presume you've been writing is your superhero self. I demand (with respect and love) your other blog name.
Love, pablo
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